reviews

Ok…I hope I don’t bore you with my tedious reviews of the said pieces that I am reviewing.
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First review: Rainy Day Dilemma
The craft in which you conveyed your idea was unique. I enjoyed the thoughts of his anticipated profession and his feelings about wet feet. It was an enjoyable piece and I have no technical errors to point out, but…(the crowd pauses with a gasp) If I met with this dilemma I would as I have seen others do consent to get my already wet feet another helping of copious amounts of water. In all Bravo!!
Beufford
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Second review: My Mothers Kitchen
I like poetry. This is a lonely piece and to me it seems to settle on the older child who sees things a little more clearly as how the parents relationship with out communication has deteriorated. The point at which the child comes in with the “yellow phone” tells me that there is a jealousy factor because the author is not the “favorite” anymore. The MC seems to be making up for being cherished by “daddy” with sympathies toward “Mom.” Overall, an enjoyable although depressing piece. Good job, if that was your intention.
Beufford
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Third review: Untitled by ipfan16
It depresses and alarms me that the poetry I have read so far speaks of broken relationships. Depression seems to me to be the best time to write poetry anyway, but I am still disturbed.
I thought the imagery was fantastic…I could practically smell the smoky atmosphere and hear the laughter. The vodka was a painful point in the piece showing that we have the misconception that our solutions lay at the bottom of liquor bottles. Depressing yet artistically well done.
Beufford
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Fourth review: The diary moans
This piece, in the beginning, is like a telling of many married couples woes. At times I felt I was remembering instead of reading. I was so caught up in my own feelings and memories that the…unfortunates at the end really threw me. The thoughts that ran through my mind when I was at the end was if there should be a time that I felt I could never forgive “her” just the thought of this happening would change all the anger. The description of pain was awesome! I can swear I have felt that pain before. The love that is prominent at the beach was a cool and refreshing wave of bliss in story dominated with pain and sorrow. I really liked this piece; depressing as it may be. It was beautiful. If I have anything negative to say it would be to repetition of the word sledgehammer. Well written and the imagery was extremely vivid.
Beufford

The Diary Moans

Chris,

Reading on Rateyourwriting.com...and I saw this story, called The Diary Moans. It was a good story, and I wanted to send you my favorite part, it was so lovely.:

Then he said an absent prayer-a distant one, a hollow thought that resonated through the dark room, the metal and concrete prison that had kept him concealed for so long. It slid under the door and floated through the dark hallway, down the stairs, caused a lady to drop her groceries and flew out, far out, way out where it got caught in a breeze that took it around the entire earth, above every hill and valley; it made the neighbors talk again. It made him feel heavy and light at the same time; it made him feel above and below, up and down, in between and in the context of all things, it gave him relief so that he forgot the pain.

Wow...I just really wanted to share that with you because I loved it. :)